Love Poem: The Accidental Sea
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Written by: Debbie Duncan

The Accidental Sea

The accidental sea
See how it washes over me.
How the waves struggle against the shore.
Leaving the sea far behind in its wake 
The clouds are beckoning them ashore.
The moon pushes them on even further
What secret knowledge holds it in place?
Kiss by kiss you uncover its secret
As we then partake in carnal knowledge.
She glides over him like a butterfly on its first wings.





 
The accidental sea.
See how it washes over me.
How the waves snuggle against the shore.
Leaving the sea far behind in its wake 
The clouds are beckoning them ashore.
The moon pushes them on even further.
What secret knowledge holds it in place?
Kiss by kiss you uncover its secret.
As we then partake in carnal knowledge.
She glides over him like a butterfly. 
As the moon watches over them from her perch. 
Watch how the waves snuggle against the shore.
For dark are the secrets we keep.


I want to know which version sounds better.  1 or  2. OR, Should I combine them? I wrote them Wednesday night  3 / 4/ 2015