Fairytale Come True- Contest Example
Original poem:
"a million fairytales tremble at us,
they know how our love does outshine with flickering light-
sounds of swift ivory doves cry out,
fleeting into the ebon night; for our love loses not insight,
never cursed or full of deep blight;
I embrace you…you hold me tight
saturated in loneliness were you-
I knew the pain of loss and despair you carried with ease;
black ravens plague this existence,
yet you stay with me, longing for my hopelessness to cease,
descending onto my grateful knees-
I sense your essence in the breeze
the wind blows, and gusts prevail,
intense obscurity of the calamity I faced before you attains-
emerging from the dust I was found
weeping in the forsaken land of my desolated heart’s remains;
as the tempest rages in warm rains,
your genuine adoration still sustains
for I am but a woman craving to be near you for all of eternity-
and I shall feel this pure affection or you, my beloved…eternally.
and...
sweetheart, you are my perpetual connection,
my alleviation found in perfection-
bound by love and affection"
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CONTEST EXAMPLE:
black ravens plague this existence,
fleeting into the ebon night-
I embrace you…you hold me tight;
I sense your essence in the breeze,
descending onto my grateful knees-
for our love loses not insight;
your genuine adoration still sustains,
the wind blows, and gusts prevail-
as the tempest rages in warm rains
saturated in loneliness were you-
sounds of swift ivory doves cry out;
they know how our love does outshine with flickering light-
never cursed or full of deep blight,
I knew the pain of loss and despair you carried with ease,
yet you stay with me, longing for my hopelessness to cease
emerging from the dust I was found-
weeping in the forsaken land of my desolated heart’s remains;
for I am but a woman craving to be near you for all of eternity-
sweetheart, you are my perpetual connection
bound by love and affection;
and I shall feel this pure adoration or you, my beloved…eternally.
intense obscurity of the calamity I faced before you attains,
my alleviation found in perfection
and...
a million fairytales tremble at us…
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FOR MY NEW CONTEST PLEASE REWRITE MY ORIGINAL POEM ABOVE AND CREATE YOUR OWN MASTERPIECE. USE LINES IN ANY ORDER AS LONG AS THEY ARE EXACTLY AS WRITTEN. YOU CAN ADD UP TO 5 LINES OF YOUR OWN. JUST MAKE SURE IT MAKES SENSE AND FLOWS WELL. THE SECOND POEM IS AN EXAMPLE OF WHAT I AM LOOKING FOR. MY SOUPMAIL IS WORKING (AT THE MOMENT) SO PLEASE SOUPIE ME WITH ANY QUESTIONS.
THANK YOU,
-luloo
Be blessed :)
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